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it's not myth. i once –
no, many times – interrupted
myself & spit it out: pegasus
flesh, dinosaur chicken nuggets,
rice & beans, into my cup while
my parents discussed acupuncture,
the housing market, family
members who only call
when they need –
                  i heard her last night.

you can tell how she's feeling
by the way she walks
today, dragging her less-than-self through hellos, words
that say nothing
at all, androgynous frame making lines
on the day, a series of negatives
superimposed on air: the dying horse
in motion. maybe
you don't think
about eating:
give fifty for one fourth cup
of pinto beans, one hundred for a half cup of brown
rice, maybe thirty five
for nine baby carrots – maybe
it comes
easy – give eighty for
an apple, depending on size. the numbers
add themselves:
stop


there was a sound & it was
of coughing & it was a piece
of something that i
recognised. she walked out
of the bathroom & down
the hallway & i believed her & i ate
all of it up & cast it
down as stones, as a pile
of bones
if you believe in
that sort of thing, like a myth but very
real in the bathroom
last night.

LOOK THIS SUB THING IS NIFTY. CRITIQUES!!!
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rober2 May 17, 2011  Professional Writer
Brilliant, especially the last part stanza. Maybe skip the part about hellos if I were you, they add very little.
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:iconanyimacielgray:
thank you! i'm going to look at it soon since it's the only workshop poem i didn't get round to revising
(:
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:icondownwardssaint:
That is amazing, to me, on many levels. I understand, to an extent, what it's about without it being spelled out, and the flow works very, very well.

And, hey, your shift key does work!

:heart:
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:iconanyimacielgray:
so many many levels (:
thank you
<3
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
you're brave for submitting this to a workshop
i'd be terrified
i only just managed to show my therapist a piece on such
marina's a fucking cow bitch and i hate her
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:iconanyimacielgray:
whatever it's not as if they really think i'm that sick
marina sometimes must keep me sane
you know
i'm already insane maybe
actually i have no idea
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:iconohsostarryeyed:
nonononononononono
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